Poetry Challenge from ragamuffen!

[ayoub]

Details: So, here is the new challenge...anyone is welcome to play along....In fact post the challenge in your journal and have your friends play along and ask them to post here just so I can read what they write...if they want to, that is.

Take a poem...any poem...your favourite poem...as long as it is a poem that you didn't write....and rewrite it. Change the style, the meter, the cadence of the whole thing. Just make you sure you keep the idea.

Change it in a way that there is absolutely no plagiarism involved. Change it so that what you love about the original can be truly felt.

So, pull out your Robert Frost, your Emily Dickinson, your Richard Brautigan or anyone that touches you and spin their words out up and let them flavor something of yours.

The Original: "Red Red Rose" by Rabbie Burns

O my Luve's like a red, red rose
That's newly sprung in June;
O my Luve's like the melodie
That's sweetly played in tune.

As fair art thou, my bonnie lass,
So deep in luve am I;
And I will luve thee still, my dear,
Till a' the seas gang dry:

Till a' the seas gang dry, my dear,
And the rocks melt wi' the sun;
I will luve thee still, my dear,
While the sands o' life shall run.

And fare thee weel, my only Luve,
And fare thee weel awhile!
And I will come again, my Luve,
Tho' it ware ten thousand mile.

My Version:

As something new
yet eternal
my heart rises
from the ground

Wishes and dreams
unfurl like petals
each a song
sweetly sung

Frozen in time
this pure moment
I will carry
beyond world's end

For this is me
and how I love
I give it freely
to you

My apologies to Rabbie, heh... I am a mere journeyman wordsmith :D

Comments

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

LMAO!

I think your gf might kill me :D