Another game

[ayoub]

10 more words:

Wave, Liquid, hypnotise, siren, undermine, joy, crave, ego, leave, body

My attempt, but can you see the trick I've used?

Like a wave washing
Over my waiting body
Vast and powerful
Elemental force

Liquid fire in my veins
Urging me ahead
Siren's song hypnotises
Touch is all I crave

She raises all of this
Overpowering my ego
Undermining my will
Leaving me hers

For pleasure
Unlimited joy
Come to me
Keep me alive

Comments

[oxsleep2dreamox.livejournal.com]

Liquid passion ran through her body
As she fed their egos with such joy and lust
She loved the feeling of their wet tongues across her bust
To have such fulfillment inside her
Pain is what she would rather prefer
She always did like it rough
Screaming loudly when she had just enough
Scratching
Pulling handfuls of hair
Such a torturous affair

She was a siren
Who loved to hypnotize men with her voice
Luring them in
She was hungry
For the touch of their warm skin
A sly grin
And a bite through their veins
A trail of blood is all that remains
Undermining their lives
Just until the next man arrives

She was a wave of destruction
Leaving them to crave her every day seduction

I am really not happy with this...Iv got the picture in my head...but the words just wont work themselves out...I might have to make some changes sometimes...but for now I am to frustrated to fix it.

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

I can see what you're saying though... and the picture looks good :)

I've had that countless times myself, I'm not as descriptive as I'd like to be :)

[oxsleep2dreamox.livejournal.com]

I really must say, that its hard for me to use 10 words that have been givin to me...the one liners dont bother me all that much. But its hard to use 10 different words and make them into something...this probably could be a lot better if I wasnt so worried about getting those words in there....But its very challenging so I love it.

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

I used to do some other challenges as well, but the word challenge is usually harder, so i like it :)