Another game

[ayoub]

10 more words:

Wave, Liquid, hypnotise, siren, undermine, joy, crave, ego, leave, body

My attempt, but can you see the trick I've used?

Like a wave washing
Over my waiting body
Vast and powerful
Elemental force

Liquid fire in my veins
Urging me ahead
Siren's song hypnotises
Touch is all I crave

She raises all of this
Overpowering my ego
Undermining my will
Leaving me hers

For pleasure
Unlimited joy
Come to me
Keep me alive

Comments

[avis-noctis.livejournal.com]

At last,
A wave stirs this placid liquid,
Pulls me from ennui.

Begin the song,
The orgiastic shiver that I crave,
I will not undermine this body.

Siren supreme,
Hyponotise with your glassy tongue,
Induce my helpless joy:
Leave the ego to decay.

[oxsleep2dreamox.livejournal.com]

ahhhh!!! I still have to do the other one!!!!!! lol...I have a lot of catching up to do..I am sure I have one to do for the weekly oneliner as well...Not to mention I am getting ready hear to post my own one liner...oh man iv got a lot of writing to do!

[shadowshape.livejournal.com]

thanks Anarkian!
posted mine on my page
love you
blessed be
xxx

[oxsleep2dreamox.livejournal.com]

Liquid passion ran through her body
As she fed their egos with such joy and lust
She loved the feeling of their wet tongues across her bust
To have such fulfillment inside her
Pain is what she would rather prefer
She always did like it rough
Screaming loudly when she had just enough
Scratching
Pulling handfuls of hair
Such a torturous affair

She was a siren
Who loved to hypnotize men with her voice
Luring them in
She was hungry
For the touch of their warm skin
A sly grin
And a bite through their veins
A trail of blood is all that remains
Undermining their lives
Just until the next man arrives

She was a wave of destruction
Leaving them to crave her every day seduction

I am really not happy with this...Iv got the picture in my head...but the words just wont work themselves out...I might have to make some changes sometimes...but for now I am to frustrated to fix it.

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

The wave of liquid molten heat she sent coursing through his veins could hypnotise his turbulent senses. She was blatent siren, he knew it, she would not refute it, and could undermine love with one look of her dark mirror eyes. She gave him joy like no other and he would crave her skin every time thereafter. His ego evenly matched hers. And so, his body would never leave the breathless playground of her own.

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

The last quatrain is exquisite :D

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

A lot of writing can only be a good thing :D

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

I can see what you're saying though... and the picture looks good :)

I've had that countless times myself, I'm not as descriptive as I'd like to be :)

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

Whew!

Hot stuff :D

All the words very well used...

[inmyocean.livejournal.com]

clever little trick:
Love
Lust
Soul
Fuck

spelled out with the beginning of each letter per stanza.

smart boy. :)

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

:D

Smart girl for figuring it out!

[pandoralily.livejournal.com]

siren songs lulling me to sleep.
hypnotize my head so i can see.
body still and mind awake.

liquid lovelyness trapped inside my head.
waves of color and light,
come to me,
leave me,
hold my pyche tight.

undermine my ego,
make my body small,
but make the joy everlasting.

wake me up when the sun shines.
when the bird sing and the flowers open.
but leave me here now.
here to dream.

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

Very nice :D

[oxsleep2dreamox.livejournal.com]

I really must say, that its hard for me to use 10 words that have been givin to me...the one liners dont bother me all that much. But its hard to use 10 different words and make them into something...this probably could be a lot better if I wasnt so worried about getting those words in there....But its very challenging so I love it.

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

I used to do some other challenges as well, but the word challenge is usually harder, so i like it :)

[hyruspoetry.livejournal.com]

The wave of molten liquid flows through my body leaving me hypnotized by your beauty. My siren, my joy, I crave for your touch, yet you undermine my feelings cracking my ego like an egg.

[ayoub.livejournal.com]

I like this, short and sweet...

[hyruspoetry.livejournal.com]

now how did we both end up using the word molten?