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ayoubevoLution Part Ten
She's so interesting
intriguing
I know she wants me
I can feel it
But I'm yours
Temptations are everywhere
but we're still together
because I have committed
just as you have
But it feels good
I will not stray
never leave you
even though you may never know
who she is
I'll be true
Temptation cannot win
for your smile still bewitches
your eyes see my soul
the world can burn
I have you
It seems like a lot of people are feeling down, these days, a miasma has settled on the world, and I for one, feel that we all need to remember one thing...
Sing it with me!
What would you do
if I sang out of tune
would you stand up
and walk out on me?
She's so interesting
intriguing
I know she wants me
I can feel it
But I'm yours
Temptations are everywhere
but we're still together
because I have committed
just as you have
But it feels good
I will not stray
never leave you
even though you may never know
who she is
I'll be true
Temptation cannot win
for your smile still bewitches
your eyes see my soul
the world can burn
I have you
It seems like a lot of people are feeling down, these days, a miasma has settled on the world, and I for one, feel that we all need to remember one thing...
Sing it with me!
What would you do
if I sang out of tune
would you stand up
and walk out on me?
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Date: 2006-05-17 08:12 am (UTC)True on lots of people feeling down these days, today my cousin texted me from Moscow that he's depressed (that happend first time he fairly stated, he never did before), I cheered him up. I have several freinds of mine complaining on life yesterday, so now I don't feel myself very well, as I think of the miasma and the people's lives in general. But you know what? Right! *singing_out_loud*:D
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Date: 2006-05-17 08:25 am (UTC)And yeah, sing!
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Date: 2006-05-17 10:40 am (UTC)Temptations are everywhere
but we're still together
because I have committed
just as you have
But it feels good
and
even though you may never know
who she is
I'll be true
Deceit is deceit. It almost feels like your main character feels he has to stay because he made the commitment and not because he truly wants to be there, the way you worded those passages. I guess I'm anti-men tonight. Sorry.
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Date: 2006-05-17 10:43 am (UTC)No need for sorry, but I do think that the essence of what I meant has been a little lost...
I was trying to convey that love can overpower fleeting temptations... and, being a guy, I can only really write from a guy's perspective :)
Sorry you're anti-men hon...
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Date: 2006-05-17 09:15 pm (UTC)This story tells me that the character still loves this person and wants to be with them. I don't feel that referencing the commitment makes it sound like the reason for staying.
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Date: 2006-05-17 09:19 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2006-05-17 09:28 pm (UTC)7:08am
and sing right along
you know I would help
you to stand!
Re: 7:08am
Date: 2006-05-17 11:21 am (UTC)That's not the song, but nicely done :)
Re: 7:08am
Date: 2006-05-17 11:33 am (UTC)try this one......
I'm vexed again
perplexed again
a simpering,whimpering
wreck again.........
Re: 7:08am
Date: 2006-05-17 11:50 am (UTC)Re: 7:08am
Date: 2006-05-17 12:02 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2006-05-17 12:11 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2006-05-17 12:11 pm (UTC)